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If I told you I loved you,
would you listen?
If I offered my soul
would you take me?

The greed of the world is unbroken
For cities are burning
And oceans are roaring
Why would one focus on me?

Is my hand all that you need?
You are the robber's red ruby
You never seem lonely;
And your eyes shine like emeralds
Stolen from celtic shores

You seem so strong and so vibrant:
A sparrow's keen cry on fading blue sky
Here I stand, with a voice like a hawk.
So how could it be that someone like you

Could ever think of someone like me?
I always find poetry is best written at night. The words flow better for me.
Wasn't really sure what I was doing, or even aiming for, I just really, really needed to write something.
Feedback is always great.
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SoraLove Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2010  Student Traditional Artist
Aww! :iconiluplz: Great comparisons!
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NuklearMouse Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2010
Thank you! :D
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shaboogamoo Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
i like your imagery, the natural comparisons, and i agree, poetry always does seem to come best at night
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NuklearMouse Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2010
Thank you very much ^^
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